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DONE:
- Everywhere:
- Cooper an able seaman, not a private.
- Rewrote descriptions of other characters in prose.
- Winchester:
- removed first name
- shortened intro to ship incident.
- merged "very assertive", etc. under Sheffield with earlier descriptions of self.
- made descriptions of other characters gender-neutral.
- Sheffield:
- removed reference to king
- Changed debtor's prison to workhouse (my bad).
- Smith:
- Made nature of attack in message more specific.
- Reordered fatalist interjections a bit.
TODO:
- Everywhere:
- Decide on exact circumstances of battle aftermath—near mainland / island, etc., and put in background or make consistent in character sheets
- Winchester:
- Shorten paragraph about father and navy? Add more personality traits?
- should be civillian / not an admiral?
- was s/he in charge on the ship / the one to give the order to abandon?
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